I said, "don't call."
He said, "okay."
He held my hand the whole drive through...
I said, "goodbye."
He said, "you too."
I could not look away...
I could not leave without saying, "I love you."
I did.
He said, "I love you too."
But he would not ask me to stay...
He did not stop me,
He did not call out,
He let me walk away...
11 comments:
....nice n touchy piece of thought...
BUT how about this ending
i thought of turning around one last time...
i did...
only to see him waiting for my glance...
he watched...he gazed...
these quandary moments will surely stay...
i still think tht this is not the end of this piece...not only bcoz its not named 'goodbye forever', 'final goodbye...' or somthing like tht...but its got potential as well...
do u think it can be proceeded as 'his return' or 'meetin a known stranger' sometime in future ?? it'll b nice to read anything like tht...
goodbye...
its realy difficult to do so when u don't want to say but you compelled to do so...
when u don't want to go but people make u to let go
its really painful to do so...
Never say goodbye cause every time you do a lil peice of me dies.....
BTW I think ur absolutly breathtakingly Beautiful
Don't ever say goodbye cause everytime you say goodbye a little peice of my heart dies...Btw I think ur absolutly mind blowingly beautiful
Why thanks Abhisheikh.....
It's sweet of you to be so kind.
I spelled your name wrong. I mean Abhishek...
I hate GoodByes and ur poem has made me to hate it more...
u know i really understand :) but once i wrote a poem for myself
" Izzteraab"
Jab Aass Ka Dhaga Tootay Tu
Her Sans Khatan Hoo Jatee Hae
Jab Qariya Qariya , Nagri Nagri
Dhund Ki Chadar Gehri Hoo
Jab Sham Ka Tara Dhalnay Tak
Sehra Ki Rait Piyasee Hoo
Jab Dil Ka Anngan Soona Ho
Aure Ashkun Ki Bondain Na Thamti Hun
Tu Sunno Larki
Yun Apna App Arzaan Naheen Kia Kertay
Ku k Ehl-e- Khird Ka Junoon Say
Na Koi Rabta Na Wasta
3-06-09 - 10 pm
wouldnt u agree to the last part ?
"yun apna app arzaan naheen kertay "
?
your comments please ?
@anonymous
i love these words..
and shahnaz,,ur words always open new door fo me
awesome anonymous...!
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